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  • a yotsumono sequence

    a potato savant

    how easily it talks to

    River Ben




    the rain as we know it

    full of teeth




    in the house of sleep

    stones grow a skin of light

    to play cards by




    lemon pit by lemon pit

    you assemble a raven




    .




    combing her hair

    with a hedgehog Midnite Lilly

    curses the moon




    now that you're no longer snow

    you can hide in a puddle




    ahead of his time

    Galileo smokes a cigar

    with a squid




    the birch that once was a boy

    with a tree's name sleeps




    .




    cool feathers

    the colonel imagines

    a river in his pocket




    then there's a new place to forget

    the keys for opening the lawn




    a large cheese

    dies before sunset to honour

    Antonioni




    a used sound moves

    to a cow's inner ear





    Last edited by jshb; 12-30-2019, 04:28 PM.

  • #2
    Bravo - a trinity of journeys 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

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    • jshb
      jshb commented
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      thank you, Ray

  • #3
    Mmmm. Yeah. This is the good stuff. Thanks for sharing Johannes.
    ghost cave i brush aside the dharma of a lobster god

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    • jshb
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      thank you, Clayton

  • #4
    Great as always! I’m curious what yotsumono means?

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    • jshb
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      it simply means "4 verses" acc. to the late and great John Carley who invented the form. There's a fabulous little book out there called "The Little Book of Yotsumono" that has a lot of examples written by 2 or 3 poets and an explanation of the rules for this short renku. The rules can probably be found on the web too.

    • Clayton Beach
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      An excellent form for solo and two-person sequences.

  • #5
    Thanks for the info. Always a lot to learn!

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    • #6
      next level, as always, Johannes
      https://underneaththebloominglaburnu...m/p/books.html

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      • jshb
        jshb commented
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        thank you, Miklu

    • #7
      A sequence of sequences. Galileo wasn’t the only one “ahead of his time”.

      And I absolutely dig this couplet:

      the rain as we know it
      full of teeth

      Brilliant! Such a unique and strong image. Great stuff Johannes.
      https://davereadpoetry.blogspot.com/

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      • jshb
        jshb commented
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        thanks a gazillion, Dave

    • #8
      I add my voice to the plaudits, Johannes.

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      • jshb
        jshb commented
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        thank you, Hansha. Much appreciated.

    • #9
      Very appealing sequence. Delight after delight and highlight after highlight. I feel as if I have entered a play by Ionesco.

      now that you're no longer snow
      you can hide in a puddle

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      • jshb
        jshb commented
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        thanks a million, Myron
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