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  • Daily Ablations: 10 Q&As by Ray & Michael

    Daily Ablations

    Why do the birds sing my morning coffee?
    innocently you spread your legs over a blackbird's tongue

    Sowing racism into a traffic jam - which radio station do you become?
    finding no excuse make toast with the mourning

    What do you make without unintended silence?
    after saluting the muskrats we take lunch with red circles

    Late for something, do you eat the sky or become a Patagonian village?
    a sugar high blue driveway pine cones fall and crunch

    Do the pheasant screams spoil your lunch?
    indigestion you become a hand gun

    Seven crumbs or the Andes, sir?
    price hiking turns a blind eye toward the sandstorm

    Why all these ambivalent water meters?
    seven minutes late for happy hour Handel sews his eyes shut

    When exactly will you beat me to death with a copper pipe?
    the after tea earthquake opens heart fault lines

    Who accounts for dinner seaweeds rise and fall?
    drunk on nothing my rib cage becomes a seahorse

    If a child fakes a fart do you fake a sniff too?
    under satin sheets the cannon shoots confetti

    Ray Caligiuri, Beaverton, Oregon, USA
    Michael O’Brien, Helsinki, Finland

  • #2
    Wow guys, very nice work! I like how you two are blending soft images/language with sharp ones.

    I especially like the following line:

    seven minutes late for happy hour Handel sews his eyes shut

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    • Michael
      Michael commented
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      🙏 Bringing the everyday out of itself. Ray was a great driving force on this one.

    • Ray Caligiuri
      Ray Caligiuri commented
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      Thanks Réka and Michael for such nice comments.

  • #3
    These are amazing guys, really nice work.
    ghost cave i brush aside the dharma of a lobster god

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    • Michael
      Michael commented
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      Thanks, Clayton

    • Ray Caligiuri
      Ray Caligiuri commented
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      My thanks also, Clayton

  • #4
    Good stuff! Anyone try it without reading the questions and just doing it blind? I’d be interested to see some of those. Not sure how you’d do it online as opposed to in person. Wonder how it was done on Lit Jellyfish?

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    • Reka Nyitrai
      Reka Nyitrai commented
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      I would love to try it out in blind .

      Probably after we agree on who is in charge with putting the question and who pens the reply --- we shall agree on a day and exact time when we both send our part in the ether (via email).

      It should be much fun!

    • Michael
      Michael commented
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      Get on it, Rich.

    • Ray Caligiuri
      Ray Caligiuri commented
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      I agree. You two you should go for it!

  • #5
    The link to my collaborative Q&A blog is https://alitjellyfish.com . The Surrealist history of the game, info on how to play it, and many examples of results can all be found there. Contributors to the blog played either in person or via written responses sent through the mail. It may be possible to play the game online as you are suggesting and still preserve the "blind" surreal aspect, which is a significant factor in the form historically, with the element of chance being essentially a kind of third player. Try using numbered questions and responses and matching these up at a set time. I would love to see the form expand in this way.
    Last edited by Michelle Tennison; 01-05-2020, 07:18 AM.

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    • Ray Caligiuri
      Ray Caligiuri commented
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      Michelle, I need to explain how and why these Q&A sequences came about. I’m new to haiku sequence and have been working with rengay, both the 3-2-3-3-2-3 and alternating monoku forms. I’m used to picking a theme like for instance daily activities used here. Also, I wanted to try a 10 sequence structure to see if a consistent arc could be created. When I saw the game structure, I thought of trying this alternating Q&A sequence. Please accept my apology if you feel I disrespected your work on https://alitjellyfish.com.
      Last edited by Ray Caligiuri; 01-05-2020, 09:35 AM.

  • #6
    Hi Ray. Nice work. No worries, no need to explain. There were some questions raised about how to play online and still preserve the element of chance. I wanted to offer a possible solution, and in case anyone hadn't seen the blog, to provide the link so that the surrealist aspect of the game (and the role of chance in that setting) is made available. Clearly there is a lot of possibility within the form, which you are already exploring. Cheers!
    Last edited by Michelle Tennison; 01-05-2020, 12:40 PM.

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