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    darkness
    in the deep woods
    sleeping starlings . . .
    these old trees do not know
    our names

    Publication credits:

    Skylark 6:2, Winter 2018
    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer





    stopping
    to carry the weight
    of my father's luggage
    his mole hills
    now mountains



    Publication credits:

    A Hundred Gourds, June 2016

    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer




    the missing piece
    of a mountain puzzle
    another mystery
    I don’t want
    to solve



    Publication credits:

    Atlas Poetica ATPO 24, Spring Issue, 2016
    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer





    muffled
    behind glass
    the untold stories
    in grandma’s
    eyes



    Publication credits:

    Atlas Poetica ATPO 24, Spring Issue, 2016 (original publication with "in my Grandma's" in line 4)
    ​​​​​​​Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer





    alone…
    beside
    a mirror
    I stare into
    my mother’s face



    Publication credits:

    Yanty’s Butterfly: Haiku Nook: An Anthology
    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer

    Revision note: removal of “glass” from original version in line 3.






    the weight
    of father’s empty luggage
    in my old bedroom
    receipts from China drift
    in the wind




    Publication credits:

    Atlas Poetica ATPO 30, Winter 2017
    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer





    brisk wind
    through a maple tree
    in late winter
    our shadows
    become still




    Publication credit:

    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer






    cracked pillars
    no longer stand
    between us…
    admitting all the times
    I’ve been wrong



    Publication credits:

    Ribbons, 2018

    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer




    childhood
    Lego castles
    we could
    only build
    so high




    Publication credits:

    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer




    waves
    ceaselessly crash
    against the shore
    I walk beside you
    without a sound



    Publication credits:

    Distant Sirens: Tanka by Jacob Salzer


    Tanka © by Jacob Salzer

  • #2
    Thank you for sharing!
    Alan

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    • #3
      Thank you for your consistent encouragement! Indeed, without your kindness, I highly doubt I would have continued writing tanka, much less send them to journals and publish my first collection of tanka. I'm certain the tanka in my first collection, Distant Sirens, are not all top-notch work, but, to be honest, I actually prefer this, as it shows my struggle and beginning stages with the form, and simultaneously establishes a kind of garden bed with enough soil to grow new plants and flowers. : ) Jacob

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      • haikutec
        haikutec commented
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        Thanks Jacob! And yes, our earlier collections can show our journey and that is no bad thing.

        Alan

    • #4
      foggy morning
      ripples disappear
      across the lake...
      will grandma forget
      our names



      Note: revised with a kind suggestion from Alan Summers. "when" taken away from the start of line 4.


      (Unpublished at the moment)

      © 2019 Jacob Salzer
      Last edited by Jacob Salzer; 08-03-2019, 05:11 PM.

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      • haikutec
        haikutec commented
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        Just a thought, partly to do with line length, mostly re nuance. What about dispensing with 'when'?

        Alan

    • #5
      Ah, I had forgotten I posted the old version here! : ) The revision and notes is in the tanka workshop section and the revision is now here as well. Thank you!
      Last edited by Jacob Salzer; 08-03-2019, 05:42 PM.

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      • #6
        tears
        during grandma's funeral . . .
        from unseen mountains
        the Columbia River flows
        into the sea


        涙せし祖母の葬式...遥かなる山より海へとコロンビア川行く



        Publication credit:

        Honorable mention, the Mt. Fuji Grand Prix Ceremony, January 26, 2019 at the Nihonbashi Theater in Tokyo

        © Jacob Salzer


        The full pamphlet of award-winning tanka and honorable mentions can be read here (English and Japanese translations):

        http://www.fujisantaisho.com/img/fujisan_kasyuu2018.pdf

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